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1min 45sec by GarretAJ 1min 45sec by GarretAJ
I could say I'm done with this because I'm actually done with it. But the truth is I'm just tired of working on it. So here it is, flaws and all.


EDIT: Those who are mentioning the critique below, I wrote an article about giving and receiving critique that might interest you garretaj.blogspot.com/2013/05/…

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Daily Deviation

Given 2014-05-27
Totally wicked scene! 
1min 45sec by GarretAJ ( Suggested by Ginryuzaki and Featured by Shue13 )
:iconprecipitous120:
I fail to see that point of this 'Art' but let me hold aside my opinion, and judge purely on it's appearance.

This is art you would expect in a comic strip, with no contrasting patterns from panel to panel. You haven't included fading due to age, that you would expect, even some dirt, paper flying... but because you included faded lines due to the speed... the far off detail of industry to the left and metropolis to the right... I have given you an adequate Deviation rating

Good luck with all your future pieces.

Advise:

I would suggest that always before you create, you think to your self... what do I want my painting to say. How can I show movement, so that it is not just a still frame, but a frozen action/encounter/happening. Why am I painting this, what do I want from this
What do you think?
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7 out of 115 deviants thought this was fair.

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That other critique is interesting, if somewhat confusing or vague. The weathering I wouldn't say is a huge issue, and could be very easily remedied if you wanted to change or finish it.

I believe I get the jist of the image. It's a reactor, either releasing a huge amount of energy or possibly receiving it from space, and the person in the foreground is racing towards it to avert some sort of impending disaster.

I have to say I am confused about the contrasts of various parts of this image however.
Is the viewer stationary or moving along with the flying bike? (skydoo? hover bike? air speeder?)
Various buildings have what appears to be motion blur, but the lower half of the picture has none anywhere. Also, buildings/objects farther from the viewer should have less motion blur than ones closer to the viewer.
If it were steam/dust from a shockwave, why is that one smoke stack on the left lazily blowing out steam/smoke? The image is not washed out anywhere enough to be glare from the vertical energy beam either. If it were tunnel vision from speeding towards the platform, it's too broad and you have some work to do to narrow it to be more tunnel-like, and not all parts of the picture have it. (eg. bottom and most of the right)

There is debris kicked up or shed by this bike yet no apparent source for this debris. It's not only within the engine exhaust, so did the bike just jump off of something? It might be helpful to have that within the edge of the picture if so. If it didn't just jump off a ledge why is it there?

The level of the roofs along the right is also higher than the roofs/ledge along the left but you can apparently see the rooftop on the right, but not the left.

The ship on the right looks out of place to me too with no motion, as though it's an old aircraft set up on a pedestal like they do at military bases. It's possible it's just hovering, but some of the buildings immediately around it have some motion blur.

Lastly is that a catwalk (sans rails) of some sort on the bottom right? If it's a ship platform the grid pattern needs to be much finer (for distance and people being able to walk on it), or larger (if it's only meant to dock ships and not have people walk on it), because it looks like an out of place catwalk thrown in because you didn't know what to put there.

There is a wonderful level of detail here, something I struggle with making believable constantly, but there is too much mis-matched scaling and conflict of details, along with confusing blur lines, to not be too distracting for the story you are trying to tell with this picture.
What do you think?
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S-O-G-A Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
Absolutely love this one.
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Undevicesimus Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2014   Artist
Where be these flaws, yo? o.O
This is f-ing flawlessly epic! :omfg:
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lstjules Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
at first glance, you really can't spot the flaws at all. Your pieces just draws us in this very cool looking city. 
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Angie-Pictures Featured By Owner May 29, 2014
Beautiful work! Congratulations on the DD! :iconflowerheartplz:

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Xandamus Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
counting down
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Hifros Featured By Owner May 28, 2014
pretty good this fition picture
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Hifros Featured By Owner May 28, 2014
fiction*
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DTRiel Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow! Awesome!
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Maffi96 Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love it !
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TheGridOfReality Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
I simply like it but I could imagine that the work could offer more (just a bit more).
However, as the artist stated that he tried of working on it so... I couldn't ask for more.

Here is what I would love to see in the image but it may not necessary to make this a perfect work. It's just my own liking.
I'd love to see the details of this futuristic building.
I'd love to somehow look close to what task she is going to do.
I guess it's 1 minute 45 seconds left to reach the target but what's next?

But I feel that the artist may not feel relaxing of doing it. Correct me if I'm wrong.
Because of the artist's other work he simply nailed it! He may be rush into finish it.

I still love to see your next move. Keep up good work man.
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BerryPAWNCH Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
Amazing technique here!  One day I hope to do work as detailed as this!  I love everything about it from the intricate building designs to the flowing water to the action blur effects and realistic cityscape.  Nothing short of BREATHTAKING.  :O
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Jetrunner Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This look reminds me of Mirror's Edge.
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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ZZimmy Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
You have a lot of perspective problems. It seems almost every piece of the image has a difference perspective. I would check that out a bit. 
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GarretAJ Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
For big scenes like this I build a model in 3d first to insure I have perfect perspective. i.imgur.com/2PQ7IaT.jpg
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JoePingleton Featured By Owner May 27, 2014   Filmographer
Very cool
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aliceeatme Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
I'm not sure if I know how to write a critique, so I'll just write mine in the comments.

In all honesty, I think Mr. Pretentious up there was right to an extent. This piece does seem a tad flat. I mean, rationally, I understand there's movement, but I can feel it, you know? Admittedly, I'm not talented with movement and action either, but I think you could have used some ideas offered in the critiques. Maybe have some papers, dust, smoke, blurred lights, etc, to show more motion in the piece. Also, the girl could be leaning forward further to show how much she wants to get there. Also, I think you should have blurred the lines a bit more at the bottom of the laser-ski. I'm sorry, but I do think there's something, that I personally find hard to discern, that's sapping this piece of some of it's life. 

However, your use of detail is amazing. It creates such an awesome mood and environment with the colours you chose and the style. And I'll mention detail again because everything is manufactured to the point where I could almost touch it. Another thing you used real well is lighting and shadow. I think the lasers, sunlight filtering through dust motes and properly drawn shadows (you have so much patience to do that) add a whole new depth to this piece. Did I mention I like the colour scheme and all the little details? They're so gorgeous, and blend in so well. 

Ooh, I think I put my finger on it. I think the perspective of the city makes this piece look less action-y and more flat. Maybe, if you have time, try narrowing down the edges of the city so the bigger buildings fit under the bridge and it gradually fades from downtown to suburb (I'll attach a picture about what I mean). And maybe make the buildings look a bit further away. Furthermore, I just noticed, your sky is so dynamic; those clouds....

I hope this helps, and I hope it doesn't come off as rude. 

Oh, and rating: 4/5

Aaaand I couldn't find a CC picture. Well, you know the cliche cityscapes? The ones that start off flat, gradually get bigger, peak in the middle, gradually get smaller, and get flat again? That's what I mean. 
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aliceeatme Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
In between the bridge lines. Not under it. They are not mean dwarves. 
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aliceeatme Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
And this is why I should always proof-read. 
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AnklesocksFox Featured By Owner May 27, 2014   Traditional Artist
 only kind of thing I'd say is flawed is the factory smoke other than that it's really amazing, I mean, not a lot of people can even come close to creating something like this, it would be even greater if it was a drawing
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Blue-Jedi Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
How cool  :)
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miiworld Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
Flaws??! BEAUTIFUL is an understatement!
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miiworld Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
And even as a critique I don't see any flaws to it. You get an A++ for tremendous effort. And get some sleep. You deserve it. :)
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SuperMoonImagination Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I don't see any flaws with this. All I see is an awesome scene that shows an epic sense of imagination and skill. Those critiques are...questionable.  Nice work! You deserved the Daily Deviation! :D
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GarretAJ Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks. I usually look forward to critique, but some times people blindside me.

Thanks a bunch.
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SuperMoonImagination Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No problem! Looking forward to seeing more of your great work!
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gamewizard-2008 Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Student Digital Artist
I can already here the rushing faaaaalls!
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DreamCyberium Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Somehow I have a feeling that the recent critiques you received are more out of jealousy than anything else.  The work is phenomenal.   I would be jealous, too.
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GarretAJ Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
I could always stand to be better. Some people approach critique with the attitude that they need to point out errors, where some errors require expertise to discuss. Where some people stop at "not sure what's wrong but there's something off" others like to fill in the blanks and make up what what the problem might be.

It think the technical term for them is "bullshitters"
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DreamCyberium Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Also, who's to say that the city had to be old or dirty?  Heck, for all we know, the civilization could have been built by extremely advanced people, judging by what tech I see portrayed in the image.   And for all we know, they're really good at keeping their city clean, in particular if they use renewable, clean methods.  If they want to point that out, well, maybe they just aren't thinking outside the box and probably lack a lot more imagination than you do.
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DreamCyberium Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Honestly, I am a bit surprised you took that as a critiques.  Judging by the ratings, many many people seemed to believe those critiques were greatly unfair.   I doubt they were trying to be complimentary if anything.   Maybe they were trying to show you guidelines for something, but they hardly said anything good about your work and they were most likely trolling, especially judging how they were spelling their words and how they managed to fuck up their grammar as they did.  In all honesty, I doubt they were seriously trying to be constructive and I disagree with a lot of what they said.   Yes, maybe they were right about some aspects, but they literally said nothing good.  At all.   As far as I am concerned, it was a trolling attempt and I am surprised you put up with it at all and gave their critiques a green light.  In all honesty, I am most certain that they are jealous- jealous people will go to a great extent just to put somebody else down.
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GarretAJ Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Here on DA I'm not too worried about it. I don't really ever deny those crits. Otherwise I would feel like I'm trying to cover up bad reviews.
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xXTsumoriXx Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
*eyes lite up* This is amazing!!!! :D
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parkurtommo Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Hahahaha I don't think Precipitous120 is very familiar with the concept of modern digital art and the increasing popularity of concept art or personal pieces designed as if they were concept art. Aside from all of the technical excellence displayed, I'd say this has fairly good storytelling due to the excellent use of the focal point and how everything leads the eye to that point, as if it were an opening to another objective in a game or something. I think this is great... Fuck the clueless people commenting on meaning... personal meaning in concept art... rofl what a joke.
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GarretAJ Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
I've noticed a lot of that happening on DA lately.

Thanks
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pablo8497 Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
it's like mirror edge x)
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Jetfreak-7 Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
Flaws my ass, the first criticism is very narrow minded. So much vague incomprehensible pseudo-intellectual drivel. Opinions are great and all but attitude should be in check too! Doing is far different from knowing.

I must apologize if my standards are low or I am easily impressed, but this is a great image. Certainly rough in some areas, but the point is certainly made. Fast stuff!
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GarretAJ Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
I wrote a blog post about critique where I discus this exact issue

garretaj.blogspot.com/2013/05/…

Thanks BTW
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delta7Xx Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
flaws? what flaws?
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SuperSmurgger Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Student Digital Artist
"Flaws and all", kidding me ?? :D It's everything but flawed ; it's just perfect !!! :love:
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Harryeagle Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
Nice detail. Very entertaining. Where are the flaws you mentioned? I don't see any!
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PsykoHilly Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
:onfire: ... excellent work!
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ISuckAtLifeRealbad Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Filmographer
Was this drawn in 1 Point Perspective?
It has that "Endless Road" Feel to it
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AdrianBirkeland Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Its like a Sci fi Chase scene with police and all sorts of crazy things going on.
The skyline setting and all that reminded me of Mirror's Edge.
Stuff feels like its going fast! :D
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MasterLion Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Student Digital Artist
I love it! :aww: :thumbsup:
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EinhanderZwei Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Have the people forgot to judge not only the contrasting match between pixels, but the whole impact, the whole experience as well?! I've read all those critiques, and, and I'm sorry, they sound as fair as 'Aragorn never sang any ballads about Gil-galad! LOTRA MOVIES ARE RUINED FOREVER BY TALENTLESS HACK PETER JACKSON!!!'.

Does your drawing have life and energy? Yes. Does it have the sense of bigger backstory going on? Yes. Does it have the motion, the subtle color balance? Yes. Does it have the 'wow effect'? Yes. Is it drawn just to be farp material for 15 yrs old 'digital artists'? Hell no. It's an excellent artwork, truly deserving 'art' to be put in! :clap:
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GarretAJ Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Haha, thanks for that. We live in a new world where everyone can voice their opinion. For some, they feel they need to approach each new thing with some criticism instead of enjoying what they can first. You can find something subjectively imperfect about everything, so if people want to critique everything, then they can.

Where it's not such a good thing to never listen to feedback I'm in a position to try and weigh everything. But my personal opinion is that this critical attitude can be a very unhappy way to live your life. (this doughnut is terrible, I ate it and got crumbs all over my car and sugar all over my hands. At least it was sweet and fluffy otherwise I would have thrown it out the window. 2 Stars)

There's nothing wrong with trying to enjoy things for what they do right. At least initially. (I loved this sweet and fluffy doughnut; I would even say it's finger licking good. It's definitely worth suffering a few crumbs in your car. 4 Stars)  
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EinhanderZwei Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome! I was just confused by how far-fetched those criticisms are; in fact, the negative ones are so over-the-top it made me think of conscious trolling or something; and I agree that the critical approach these days is different from the past, but unlike the old one, sometimes it makes way for ridiculous 'I HATE THAT PIXEL' stuff like this...
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William-Black Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Professional Digital Artist

Is Type1arts guilty of copyright infringement? Yes.

 

The following information is found at about.deviantart.com/policy/co… under the heading:

 

“What is Copyright Infringement?”

 

To simplify this question, copyright infringement occurs when you do certain things with a creative work which someone else produced without first getting the proper permission.

 

Some examples of copyright infringement (this is only a partial listing) can include:

 

1. Placing someone else's photograph or creative work online without proper permission.

 

2. Using a creative work commercially without permission.

 

3. Adapting someone else's creative work found in one medium to another medium, such as making a book into a movie or a photograph into a painting.

 

4. Modifying or editing a creative work without proper permission.

 

 – from Copyright Policy about.deviantart.com/policy/co…

 

Here are the facts: On March 18, 2014, Type1arts placed a comment on one of my images stating his intent to post it to his tumbler account. I responded within 17 minutes of his comment ordering him to cease and desist, and informing him of my right to refuse him permission to re-post my artwork.

 

Despite my notice Type1arts has posted my artwork without authorization on his tumbler account. As of this date further actions are underway.

 

I recognize that it is up to you as the artist to decide if you want to permit Type1arts to re-post your artwork, but consider the following: if this user has no respect for your right to control the placement of your work, what other violations of your rights might this user commit?

 

Consider and act as your judgment dictates.  

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GarretAJ Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
I don't sell my work to make money. I work in entertainment so exposure is important to me. it's in my best interest to let people post my stuff so that I maintain an internet presence.
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