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1min 45sec by GarretAJ 1min 45sec by GarretAJ
I could say I'm done with this because I'm actually done with it. But the truth is I'm just tired of working on it. So here it is, flaws and all.


EDIT: Those who are mentioning the critique below, I wrote an article about giving and receiving critique that might interest you garretaj.blogspot.com/2013/05/…

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Daily Deviation

Given 2014-05-27
Totally wicked scene! 
1min 45sec by GarretAJ ( Suggested by Ginryuzaki and Featured by Shue13 )
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I fail to see that point of this 'Art' but let me hold aside my opinion, and judge purely on it's appearance.

This is art you would expect in a comic strip, with no contrasting patterns from panel to panel. You haven't included fading due to age, that you would expect, even some dirt, paper flying... but because you included faded lines due to the speed... the far off detail of industry to the left and metropolis to the right... I have given you an adequate Deviation rating

Good luck with all your future pieces.

Advise:

I would suggest that always before you create, you think to your self... what do I want my painting to say. How can I show movement, so that it is not just a still frame, but a frozen action/encounter/happening. Why am I painting this, what do I want from this
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That other critique is interesting, if somewhat confusing or vague. The weathering I wouldn't say is a huge issue, and could be very easily remedied if you wanted to change or finish it.

I believe I get the jist of the image. It's a reactor, either releasing a huge amount of energy or possibly receiving it from space, and the person in the foreground is racing towards it to avert some sort of impending disaster.

I have to say I am confused about the contrasts of various parts of this image however.
Is the viewer stationary or moving along with the flying bike? (skydoo? hover bike? air speeder?)
Various buildings have what appears to be motion blur, but the lower half of the picture has none anywhere. Also, buildings/objects farther from the viewer should have less motion blur than ones closer to the viewer.
If it were steam/dust from a shockwave, why is that one smoke stack on the left lazily blowing out steam/smoke? The image is not washed out anywhere enough to be glare from the vertical energy beam either. If it were tunnel vision from speeding towards the platform, it's too broad and you have some work to do to narrow it to be more tunnel-like, and not all parts of the picture have it. (eg. bottom and most of the right)

There is debris kicked up or shed by this bike yet no apparent source for this debris. It's not only within the engine exhaust, so did the bike just jump off of something? It might be helpful to have that within the edge of the picture if so. If it didn't just jump off a ledge why is it there?

The level of the roofs along the right is also higher than the roofs/ledge along the left but you can apparently see the rooftop on the right, but not the left.

The ship on the right looks out of place to me too with no motion, as though it's an old aircraft set up on a pedestal like they do at military bases. It's possible it's just hovering, but some of the buildings immediately around it have some motion blur.

Lastly is that a catwalk (sans rails) of some sort on the bottom right? If it's a ship platform the grid pattern needs to be much finer (for distance and people being able to walk on it), or larger (if it's only meant to dock ships and not have people walk on it), because it looks like an out of place catwalk thrown in because you didn't know what to put there.

There is a wonderful level of detail here, something I struggle with making believable constantly, but there is too much mis-matched scaling and conflict of details, along with confusing blur lines, to not be too distracting for the story you are trying to tell with this picture.
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S-O-G-A Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
Absolutely love this one.
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Undevicesimus Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2014   Artist
Where be these flaws, yo? o.O
This is f-ing flawlessly epic! :omfg:
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lstjules Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
at first glance, you really can't spot the flaws at all. Your pieces just draws us in this very cool looking city. 
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Angie-Pictures Featured By Owner May 29, 2014
Beautiful work! Congratulations on the DD! :iconflowerheartplz:

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Xandamus Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
counting down
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Hifros Featured By Owner May 28, 2014
pretty good this fition picture
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Hifros Featured By Owner May 28, 2014
fiction*
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DTRiel Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow! Awesome!
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Maffi96 Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love it !
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TheGridOfReality Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
I simply like it but I could imagine that the work could offer more (just a bit more).
However, as the artist stated that he tried of working on it so... I couldn't ask for more.

Here is what I would love to see in the image but it may not necessary to make this a perfect work. It's just my own liking.
I'd love to see the details of this futuristic building.
I'd love to somehow look close to what task she is going to do.
I guess it's 1 minute 45 seconds left to reach the target but what's next?

But I feel that the artist may not feel relaxing of doing it. Correct me if I'm wrong.
Because of the artist's other work he simply nailed it! He may be rush into finish it.

I still love to see your next move. Keep up good work man.
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